Sure Shot pg.6

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MoeAlmighty
5th May 2020, 7:03 PM

So what are the chances Kit is going to be mistaken for a mary-sue just because she used her little grey cells?

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Otaku
6th May 2020, 12:31 PM

To be fair, it is pretty easy to avoid this looking like a Mary Sue situation if it was really a concern. Just have her almost have fallen for such a con in the past. Or make it something a mentor/friend in the business/etc. warned her about.

Having her figure it out is fine as well... because you did it up front. Mary Sue-ness is earned when the brilliant moment comes out of nowhere, or is used to resolve the one bit of challenge/tension/etc. that was being offered in the story.

Having a character suddenly make a brilliant deduction that requires some very specific knowledge (even in their field) is like having a character saved from a chest shot because of [insert thing] they always keep in their coat/breastpocket... but you never established they had that thing in their pocket before, that it was always on them, and that it was durable enough to take the hit.

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Mr.A
6th May 2020, 12:31 PM

I could believe she'd deduce this, especially if that kind of thing has happened to her before.

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